This is possibly going to be the first chapter of my sequel novel. Feedback and reviews welcome!
This is possibly going to be the first chapter of my sequel novel. Feedback and reviews welcome!
Engaging story Laz. Good luck with it.
My compliments. It is lean, effective story-telling in classic science fiction style.
Bkmrk
When humanity set up the first base on Europa, they discovered that Europa fairly teemed with a bizarre menagerie of life forms. Most of them were single-cell organisms, based on biochemistry completely alien to those found on Earth. There were larger life forms in thousands of configurations, too. They mostly congregated around the various hot spots in the oceans, but even away from the heated vents, the waters were full of life. The most deadly were the Sprites.
These worm-like creatures, which could reach lengths up to eight meters long, were all teeth and body. If you were to compare them to an Earth-based life form. they were most analogous to Earth’s sharks. They had no eyes, but were able to locate prey by using their acute hearing. They were deadly, and they could burrow through the ice with ease, almost as easily as swimming through water.
OUTSTANDING Laz! Has me on the edge of my seat. (LOL sausage fingers)
Big SciFi fan,
I almost didn’t read this sample because I knew it would be a cliffhanger. But of course, I did, and now must wait for the work to be completed. Please keep it going!!!!
Did you mean sapient? It should be sentient.
L
Thank you for your suggestions. I will definitely consider them!
congratulations, I love good sci-fi and perhaps you were wanting this, perhaps not but I followed your link to more reviews and just ordered the paperback, it’ll be here Monday. I look forward to reading it especially if it is the page turner that some have said it is.
The most obvious item of trade from Europa is water. It would be sent towards the other colonies to be used as rocket fuel. The asteroids would be a better place to mine for rare Earth’s. Creatures that tear through ice? How would such a thing evolve into that? ...unless they were deliberately created.
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Eeeewwwwww. Creepy! Reminiscent of Bradbury.
Say, Laz... I’ve always heard it said, “Write what you know”. Where did you say you’re from? 🤔😜
I have a small critique, observation, and suggestion if I may? If this is the whole first chapter it had a feeling of finality already. It began and then felt like it has already ended, mission dead, character dead, done. Or is this just an excerpt of the first chapter? It felt like it needs a lead and “hook” into whether this character actually has any possible chance or not going into the next chapter to make me curious. Anyone else around to save him? Or is that it and the next chapter is going to start with a whole new mission and new character because this one now seems to be done already?
You need to put a cover on it like a Harlequin romance with a half-naked chick in the arms of Adonis. It will draw them in like flies to a turd.
Well written and well paced.
HOU might wish to read up on the Trikaya: Nirmanakaya ( body of form). Sambhogakaya ( biody of energy or the enjoyment body,and the Dharmakaya,the body of unborn, unorignated and unceasing space.. I am sure it would give you some interesting ideas about the subject matter, especially the Sambhogakaya, the body of energy, this energy is what the sprites gods and godesses are made from.The lineage sprites are called Yidams, and these are beneficial to human beings.
Killed poor Martini in the first chapter!
You’ve caught my interest, I await what comes next.