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Posted on 07/12/2025 1:33:31 AM PDT by Lazamataz
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Ping-la-ping ... :D
Not sure why, but that character’s name of Pedro Martini brought up recognition of Neapolitan Dynamite as he worked his way into dying on the job site.
Pedro For President.
Mankind, humanity, earthling..... For many reviewers and readers the choice of words creates a different image based on what the reader brings from outside this experience.
worm-like... 8 meters long....all teeth and body.
Is it key how readers visualize? Will its body wrap around? or penetrate? or just nibble with its teeth?
Scott Brick is probably the best. Probably unaffordable. Probably oversaturated at this point. I just finished the Hell Divers series and R.C. Bray is really good. It’s sci/fi premise is similar to your genre and would be a good match. But ACX has tons of talent looking to get a start for an affordable price. Let me know if I can help you navigate ACX/Audible.
https://www.audiobooksnow.com/audiobook/hell-divers/1339164/
The first item of trade for the Moon is the ice in the craters on the poles. In perpetual darkness those spots are probably the most valuable real estate in the solar system. Much cheaper than having to haul up water from Earth. Very likely to be an area of considerable tension because of the various powers desires to get there first.
One neat feature of living on the Moon is that the Earth is always in the same place in the sky. Architects would likely build that view in as a permanent feature.
Where do we find your first novel?
You need to put a cover on it like a Harlequin romance with a half-naked chick in the arms of Adonis. It will draw them in like flies to a turd.
Why is there sound on the surface of the moon?
Why does the rover have a microphone?
“This is a hallmark of my writing. Others struggle to get their work edited out to a reasonable length; I struggle to ‘pad’ it out to the minimum number of words to be considered a novel. If brevity is the soul of wit, I’m a freakin’ genius.”
Laz — I enjoyed it. Reminds me of sci-fi novels I read growing up.
The brevity is refreshing in this world of self-important people who won’t shut up. Your fewer words style is perfect from my perspective. Less can be more.
Great just as it is but I sense there is room within your fertile imagination to get even more creative and more weird. I suspect you will. Go the distance.
Great job!
Well written and well paced.
HOU might wish to read up on the Trikaya: Nirmanakaya ( body of form). Sambhogakaya ( biody of energy or the enjoyment body,and the Dharmakaya,the body of unborn, unorignated and unceasing space.. I am sure it would give you some interesting ideas about the subject matter, especially the Sambhogakaya, the body of energy, this energy is what the sprites gods and godesses are made from.The lineage sprites are called Yidams, and these are beneficial to human beings.
You find it here. I hope it enthralls you!
If you like it, you have no idea how much an Amazon review helps!
Thank you for your kind words! These aren’t true sprites, this was just the name given to the worms by the first explorers. Still, worth looking into this mythos...
Hey snork. I’m a professional writer. More technical writing.
To be blunt Laz is better than me with fiction and character development. If he thinks your writing is good, it is good.
And Laz doesn’t hold back if he thinks something is not good.
BTW *I* think your start is good too. I’ve seen dozens of manuscripts. Shot down probably 95% of them. I don’t hold back either.
Fair warning: getting a book to marker is not easy. Takes time and persistence.
Leading with exposition is usually a death-knell for a book. Personally, if the first two paragraphs of a book I am reading are exposition, I might just put the book down. I prefer to lead with character action, or internal and external dialogue.
I wish I could say I chose this style, but I didn't. It chose me.
I liken it to Hemmingway; he tends towards brevity, too.
Great just as it is but I sense there is room within your fertile imagination to get even more creative and more weird. I suspect you will. Go the distance.
Oh, you just wait!
Great job!
Thanks!
Well, this alien is female.
Kinda.
She is rather…bulbous and naughty.
Disregard, I ordered a copy of Dimensions of Essence from Amazon.
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