Posted on 05/17/2005 12:02:31 AM PDT by ConPunk
I will take comments on this as far as structure, argument strength, grammerical, ect. Also check out my blog and my other articles on my 'blog.'
Blog Pimp.
Message recieved and understood - conservatives told to step aside for new mutant socialism/piratism hybrid.
Got to kill us first.
Great stuff, made me tired for bed instantly.
I'm just happy to be here early.
Who can ask for anything more? Who can ask for anything more?
Newbie says, "I will take comments on this as far as structure, argument strength, grammerical, ect..."
I think I'll take grammerical, ect for 500
Also nice of the author to dictate terms to you, wasn't it? ;-)
This thread is a great cure for insomnia though.
The author is obviously young, lonely, far too full of himself, and is utterly clueless to boot. Oh yes, and boooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooring !
Subject: Polar shift
He says there's the Democrats. That makes 1
He says there's the Republicans. That makes 2
Now look at a globe and you find only two poles. But he says there's a polar shift with a third party with the other two parties existing with the New Liberals. Huh?
This one started as a paper for a comparative politics class, I just started polishing it, figure I'd get some input from some like minded people...was I wrong?
For sure never trust anyone in favor of a third party.
You imagine that you'd find "like minded" people here, HERE< in a CONSERVATIVE POLITICAL FORUM,mostly filled with adults, who know and understand politics? REALLY ? When you neither know nor understand politics nor Conservatism?
Look kid, this is a serious place and we're really NOT interested in being your wet nurse. We don't clean up children's term papers, nor help them polish their blogs. THIS ISN'T A KINDERGARTEN !
Nor one who can't do simple math. :-)
You sound like a liberal.
Go to bed...it's past your bedtime. ;^)
Ahh, Give the guy a break! At least he is trying to understand and improve.
I understand not wanting to re-write his paper for him, give a history lesson, nor even define the more basic terms more accurately...
But I read the whole thing, and he isn't completely wrong about the general idea. I've read much worse tripe from Pulitzer Prize winners.
The first thing I'd do though, ConPunk, is run it through spell check.
Now why don't you tell him how you really feel?
After we defeated Germany and Japan in WW II, for instance, we "changed their regimes," rather successfully I add. That was neither a conservative nor liberal idea. It was merely the common sense consequence of winning that war.
You asked for criticism. Your article gets its knickers in a twist over a nonexistent issue. Scrub it and start over from scratch.
Congressman Billybob
Missed the spellcheck or intentional?
The Republican Party has completely abandoned its notions of tradition and conservatism.
Belief in the sanctity of life is a conservative ideal, and it is a belief far more likely to be held by a Republican than a democRAT.
It'll get polished quite well here..
I'll level with you. I thought you were a troll.
If you are sincere, the harsh response that you received writing on this forum is tame compared to what you receive from any "good" editor or mentor. If you wish to become a writer you will internalize these critical voices.
Elements of Style -- Strunk and White
Writing with Style -- Trimble
From Sight To Insight -- Rackham
The Complete Works of Monty Python (you need humor and satire)
I'll leave the political critique to the wonks of the forum.
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