[ConPunk]

This one started as a paper for a comparative politics class, I just started polishing it, figure I'd get some input from some like minded people...was I wrong?

[nopardons]

Frankly, it stinks. Your prof may have liked it, but it isn't well thought out at all, is juvenile, puerile, hackneyed, and boring.

You imagine that you'd find "like minded" people here, HERE< in a CONSERVATIVE POLITICAL FORUM,mostly filled with adults, who know and understand politics? REALLY ? When you neither know nor understand politics nor Conservatism?

Look kid, this is a serious place and we're really NOT interested in being your wet nurse. We don't clean up children's term papers, nor help them polish their blogs. THIS ISN'T A KINDERGARTEN !

[BJClinton]

It'll get polished quite well here..

[sully777]

I'll level with you. I thought you were a troll.

If you are sincere, the harsh response that you received writing on this forum is tame compared to what you receive from any "good" editor or mentor. If you wish to become a writer you will internalize these critical voices.

Elements of Style -- Strunk and White
Writing with Style -- Trimble
From Sight To Insight -- Rackham
The Complete Works of Monty Python (you need humor and satire)


I'll leave the political critique to the wonks of the forum.