Posted on 10/23/2012 2:02:32 PM PDT by Typical_Whitey
Eyes wide with fear as I anxiously wait
the details running through my mind each day,
time is fleeting; I pray I am not late,
for any mistake, I will have to pay.
But what of this insatiable beast
that takes from some, punished for their hard work.
It gorges on itself, a bloating feast,
while ruling from on high with cynics smirk.
Punishment is the price of labors pain,
while some will gladly live, no payment due.
You cannot fight this, trying is insane,
prepare, for it will always come for you.
So add it up, and accept what is true,
On April fifteenth your taxes are due.
Alternate end:
So add it all up, and pay your fair share,
On April fifteenth, the taxman is there.
Or:
So add it all up, and pay your full sum
On April fifteenth the taxman will come.
How did I do? I offer three different ending couplets, which one sounds best. Any help is appreciated.
Thank You.
Cute. Not great, but passable.
I LOVE it. It’s great. I think I prefer your original ending, although all are good. Good work.
Thanks for the feedback, I will stick with the original than.
I dislike poetry, especially Haiku and rap.
How do you feel about doggerel?
First ending, definately. Nice.
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