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To: MHGinTN

I didn't feel it from Margaret's, the police, or Simeon's persepective. I felt that I was involved though - like I had a front row seat for the action. On the outside but still involved.


201 posted on 03/30/2007 9:49:42 AM PDT by carton253 (Not enough space to express how I truly feel.)
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To: carton253

That was the intended perspective, achieved by switching back and forth without a personal attachment. And that's what works well in action scenes ... the reader's mind automatically makes a choice of perspective if not directed by the writer.


202 posted on 03/30/2007 9:53:55 AM PDT by MHGinTN (If you've had life support. Promote life support for others.)
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To: carton253

I thought it was tight and dramatic; this Sim is a guy worth watching.

What is clever here is that this episode could be used as an opening paragraph or it could be inserted anywhere in the work; even as an ending, whetting our appetites for more.


557 posted on 04/24/2009 10:48:17 AM PDT by Old Professer (The critic writes with rapier pen, dips it twice, then writes again.)
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