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I’m on a second/fifth listen.

Your best so far, hands down.

Love the riffs and the lyrics and would continue working on a few details.

If I may.

Extend the opening riff just a few seconds longer, make them wait for the next/first cut-in. (tease them)

I really like how your tracks are laid. They work very well together.

The vocal track however comes in a little too strong, could be the volume, but given how your music tracks start and build I would like to hear your vocal track do the same. I would consider adding new lyrics on the front end to accommodate the transition.

I don’t mean to be critical since I could never do what you’re doing, but I have the sense that you are actually looking for critical feedback.

And the lastly, the chorus “Welcome to the crazy years” I would intermix an alternate line like, “Welcome to a world of fears” and or as the music builds “We are here for all your fears”.

Just my two cents.

Thank you very much for the kind words and constructive criticism. I'll address the points you made in order.

Extend the opening riff just a few seconds longer, make them wait for the next/first cut-in. (tease them)

Agreed.

The vocal track however comes in a little too strong, could be the volume, but given how your music tracks start and build I would like to hear your vocal track do the same. I would consider adding new lyrics on the front end to accommodate the transition.

Interesting. The vocal may well be a bit loud - I don't have monitor speakers, and mostly mix through headphones. (I try to compensate for their quirks, but don't always succeed.)

WRT lyrical build-up, I was seriously PO'ed when I wrote this song (you can guess why), and subtlety went out the window. It's definitely an idea if I decide to expand or re-record the song.

And the lastly, the chorus “Welcome to the crazy years” I would intermix an alternate line like, “Welcome to a world of fears” and or as the music builds “We are here for all your fears”.

Also a possibility. The chorus is repetitive because I was trying to pound that one idea home, but variation could also work. Again, I'll give it some thought.

I was indeed looking for feedback, and I appreciate your providing it.

I would intermix an alternate line like, “Welcome to a world of fears” and or as the music builds “We are here for all your fears”.

How about a orwellian sounding voice, in the background saying, “welcome to the new world disorder” ?