I’m on a second/fifth listen.
Your best so far, hands down.
Love the riffs and the lyrics and would continue working on a few details.
If I may.
Extend the opening riff just a few seconds longer, make them wait for the next/first cut-in. (tease them)
I really like how your tracks are laid. They work very well together.
The vocal track however comes in a little too strong, could be the volume, but given how your music tracks start and build I would like to hear your vocal track do the same. I would consider adding new lyrics on the front end to accommodate the transition.
I don’t mean to be critical since I could never do what you’re doing, but I have the sense that you are actually looking for critical feedback.
And the lastly, the chorus “Welcome to the crazy years” I would intermix an alternate line like, “Welcome to a world of fears” and or as the music builds “We are here for all your fears”.
Just my two cents.
Extend the opening riff just a few seconds longer, make them wait for the next/first cut-in. (tease them)
Agreed.
The vocal track however comes in a little too strong, could be the volume, but given how your music tracks start and build I would like to hear your vocal track do the same. I would consider adding new lyrics on the front end to accommodate the transition.
Interesting. The vocal may well be a bit loud - I don't have monitor speakers, and mostly mix through headphones. (I try to compensate for their quirks, but don't always succeed.)
WRT lyrical build-up, I was seriously PO'ed when I wrote this song (you can guess why), and subtlety went out the window. It's definitely an idea if I decide to expand or re-record the song.
And the lastly, the chorus Welcome to the crazy years I would intermix an alternate line like, Welcome to a world of fears and or as the music builds We are here for all your fears.
Also a possibility. The chorus is repetitive because I was trying to pound that one idea home, but variation could also work. Again, I'll give it some thought.
I was indeed looking for feedback, and I appreciate your providing it.
I would intermix an alternate line like, Welcome to a world of fears and or as the music builds We are here for all your fears.
How about a orwellian sounding voice, in the background saying, “welcome to the new world disorder” ?