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To: Fedora
She was a wimp, at Entmoot... all the warm-clime types stayed out of the water, us cold weather people had fun. Until the jellyfish arrived.
11,543 posted on 03/03/2004 2:31:57 PM PST by JenB
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To: JenB; Fedora
all the warm-clime types stayed out of the water, us cold weather people had fun.

I am NOT a fan of cold water! Just standing in the waves took my breath away!!

11,547 posted on 03/03/2004 2:40:34 PM PST by SuziQ
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To: JenB
She was a wimp, at Entmoot... all the warm-clime types stayed out of the water, us cold weather people had fun. Until the jellyfish arrived.

I like warm water!--much better than snorkeling around here in 50-60-degree water, plus you can see farther down there because the water is clearer. Wouldn't want to be in the water with jellyfish, though! I can also sympathize with Renee not wanting to be in the water with sharks--seen too many documentaries on surfing "accidents" :)

BTW, did you get my last reply to you last night with regards to the writing question I asked you? I think I posted it right after you logged off, so if you missed it here it is again:

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Does that help? I'm struggling with "make something happen, everyone's just talking", myself.

Thanks, that helps some--fits with the advice I'm getting from Ben Bova's book on writing SF, which I'm reading now for tips. On the thing you're struggling with, there's some good discussion of that in Monica Wood, Description, Chapters 2 and 4. If you can't find it in your library/bookstore I can write up a summary for you--should probably review that myself anyway. Offhand a couple things I'd suggest are 1) make the talking relate to the action and 2) when people are talking, whenever possible describe them as moving rather than sitting still--like for instance they might be travelling in a car between scenes; this is something I do in my novel so that there's still a sense of motion/progress even during dialogue.

11,549 posted on 03/03/2004 2:42:42 PM PST by Fedora
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