If you're going to use English translation, try going with an English liturgy that has been under development for 500 years, rather than one that had a first draft in 1965?
Although it was the scholarship and tremendous grasp of English as a spoken language among the English divines of the 16th and 17th centuries that pretty much developed that liturgy whole.
I'm pretty much in awe of Cranmer, his assistants, and the committee that produced the Authorized Version (probably the only decent thing every produced by a committee.)