Many salient points, Evelyn makes up in points for voluminous facts what she loses in her irratatingly bad grammar.
Did you mean: “irritatingly” bad grammar?
“Many salient points, Evelyn makes up in points for voluminous facts what she loses in her irratatingly bad grammar.”
There is no argument about the writer’s grammar, however it is ironic that the critic uses incorrect spelling in his criticism.
Ditto.