[pcottraux]

Well, behold, people.

Here is my third try. After low readership and few responses, I press onward. If I decide to do this regularly, Fridays sound like a good time. I could call it my "Friday Night FReeptoons" or something.

Carry on.

[RikaStrom]

I'll give you a hit and I am pretty sure that I saw one of your toons in one of Pookies list.

[nanetteclaret]

Very clever!

[Flyer]

My 2¢. . .

A lot less prose. Let your drawing do more of the speaking.

Practice on the text style. It is as important as the images.

Make each scene fit in the same size panel.

Otherwise, keep it up!

[LowOiL]

BTTT...

[pollyannaish]

Great start pcottraux. Keep up the practice. It is particularly impressive that you taught yourself to draw by obsessive practicing. That is a good sign.

I second flyer's suggestions by saying that the best way to refine the humor is to think of the picture and minimal dialog as the story teller...and the details as the punchline.

I look forward to your next one.

[RightWhale]

On the lettering, try lining up on a strict horizontal line rather than angling upward. See how that looks.

[andyk]

Thanks for sharing; keep it up! There're lots of good suggestions here.

[VegasCowboy]

I like it!

[auboy]

Lots of positive criticism on this thread. Keep working to improve your craft and follow your passion!

[joebuck]

If you enjoy doing this then by all means keep it up. Look, nobody ever became Al Capp overnight, not even Al Capp. I see a lot of promise there if you keep working at it, regardless of what anyone else says. I would note that in the very early work of my favorite cartoonists, the actual artwork was no better, or even worse, than yours. What made those guys was their wit. The artwork usually caught up later. If you can get someone to chuckle and say "Aint that the truth" at the same time then you've done your job.

[Califelephant]

I like the media shark ... good character.

[Califelephant]

As a matter of fact, I suggest you title your comic "Mediashark", and make it a three panel strip with Mediashark as the main character.

[TaxRelief]

Post them with borders:

[skinkinthegrass]

Suggestions....Use large Crocodiles and/or Piranha, Would to be a good alternates, too...no fur or feathers (too difficult to drawn right) / use scales (smooth lines) only.

I know, everybody a critic. :D

[Diva Betsy Ross]

I give you credit for putting it out there...just remember-you can be anything you want to be- you just may have to work for it however...Best of Luck to you in your endeavors.

[hummingbird]

After all the neat suggestions posted here, I'm inclined to give it a try myself!

Another bump for ya'!