Perhaps. I will consider your suggestion.
i do like the descriptive nature of your work. to the point.
This is a hallmark of my writing. Others struggle to get their work edited out to a reasonable length; I struggle to 'pad' it out to the minimum number of words to be considered a novel.
If brevity is the soul of wit, I'm a freakin' genius. 😊
also, i didnt get a sense of what is considered a large sprite. just that the helmet was cracked… perhaps in the defense of it, the size can have some context, like the gloves he hated saving him or not saving him.
“This is a hallmark of my writing. Others struggle to get their work edited out to a reasonable length; I struggle to ‘pad’ it out to the minimum number of words to be considered a novel. If brevity is the soul of wit, I’m a freakin’ genius.”
Laz — I enjoyed it. Reminds me of sci-fi novels I read growing up.
The brevity is refreshing in this world of self-important people who won’t shut up. Your fewer words style is perfect from my perspective. Less can be more.
Great just as it is but I sense there is room within your fertile imagination to get even more creative and more weird. I suspect you will. Go the distance.
Great job!