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To: MrsEmmaPeel

"I so enjoy discussions like these", she said wielding a bloody axe in her hand.

"I so enjoy discussions like these," she said, wielding a bloody axe in her ready, twitching hand.

75 posted on 08/30/2007 5:22:09 AM PDT by bannie

To: bannie; G8 Diplomat

Is "In her hand" redundant?
is it better written as:

"I so enjoy discussions like these," she said, wielding a bloody axe.

Have to admit, I do like the "ready, twitching" addition.

78 posted on 08/30/2007 4:54:33 PM PDT by MrsEmmaPeel

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