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To: bannie; G8 Diplomat
Is "In her hand" redundant?
is it better written as:

"I so enjoy discussions like these," she said, wielding a bloody axe.

Have to admit, I do like the "ready, twitching" addition.

78 posted on 08/30/2007 4:54:33 PM PDT by MrsEmmaPeel
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To: MrsEmmaPeel

I think you’re right.

“In her hand” is probably not needed.

Good call!


80 posted on 08/30/2007 5:29:44 PM PDT by bannie
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To: MrsEmmaPeel

Maybe...

“...artfully wielding...”

or

“...tentatively wielding...”

or

“...gleefully wielding...”

or

“...comically wielding...”
(just kidding!!!)


81 posted on 08/30/2007 5:32:07 PM PDT by bannie
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