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Posted on 08/07/2007 7:52:15 AM PDT by HairOfTheDog
Welcome to The Hobbit Hole!
Sing hey! for the bath at close of day
That washes the weary mud away!
A loon is he that will not sing:
O! Water Hot is anoble thing!
O! Sweet is the sound of falling rain.
and the brook that leaps from hill to plain;
but better than rain or rippling streams
is Water Hot that smokes and steams.
O! Water cold we may pour at need
down a thirsty throat and be glad indeed;
but better is Beer, if drink we lack,
and Water Hot poured down the back.
O! Water is fair that leaps on high
in a fountain white beneath the sky;
but never did fountain sound so sweet
as splashing Hot Water with my feet!
I’ll just do it on the fly. It’s not that long a scene and I have to write the prelims to it anyway (I see now) so I can just spend twenty minutes and redo it too.
I guess that works. Just do it when ever other scenes are writing slow. You could probably fit 6-10k more words in what you already have in just description. I would beef up the initial bookstore one (not huge, just some) punch up the first trip to Fariyland a fair bit (mommy I want to ride the ferris-wheel) and really kick around the stuff in the castle. Mainly the rescue scene and their time in the dungeon. Get them some tension in there before she gets in his... head. Really I don't think you should do any of this until you hit 50 but while you are at it... and it should only up the word count. All that stuff I mentioned would not be taking anything away. Could do it all without deleting almost anything. One trick I used two years ago was tag things in italics or something that you KNOW you are going to delete later and then rewrite it right there under it. So keep the total word count based on what you have actually written but have the first edit already sort of in there. That was just for whole paragraphs os scenes that I knew had to go. But what do I know. I have only failed at this twice :P
Yup those are definitely things to fix on the rewrite. Inserting descriptions is an editing action and cuts down on the initial storytelling flow. But changing a scene the way I’m planning - something I wrote in the last two days and have a good way to patch into my daily output anyway - doesn’t feel the same, somehow.
You have an odd way of putting things. Makes me feel like my novel is more pg13 than it actually is.
Writers bock? ;-)
I only use second-level swear words and they are all needed :) I think calling the Queen “Ms. Evil Lady” doesn’t quite have the same effect as “Ice B****”
And none of the good guys are having extramartial affairs. And I’m not going into detail. So there.
Your word count is really awesome :) I have to keep working or you’ll catch me.
You didn’t have any margaritas.
No kidding?
Drink’n kilt it.
Nah, it’s just hung over.
I'M IN UR DRAWRS
HA!!
I’m watching Legally Blonde. I’m sorry...I have to apologize right up front, but I love this movie.
It’s a character flaw, I know.
Er...somehow I doubt I’m gonna make up a six thousand word gap anytime soon. ;-)
But at least I’ve got about a day’s worth of padding. May come in handy when the I-can’t-write-blues hit, as they’re likely to do soon.
But did she fall when she went to get out? ;-)
Cute.
I didn’t witness her getting out - I don’t know if she did it with grace or not :~)
Mine have done that a time or two. I mostly cured it but just shutting the drawer for a few minutes. hehe
I’m gonna use swear words when the bombs go off. I figure if there’s ever a good time to swear it’s being two blocks down from a car bomb. Just sayin. And he won’t even be a major character.
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