Just looking at the scansion (fit of words with rhythm) I’d change “SUV” to “pickup” or “Hummer.”
In the 4th verse, I’d use “claim THAT I had done a crime of hate.”
In the last verse, you need a 3-syllable word in place of “nitwits.”
(Gol-lee this makes me feel old!)
Good.
In the 4th verse, I’d use “claim THAT I had done a crime of hate.”
Better. It's still awkwardly-worded.
In the last verse, you need a 3-syllable word in place of “nitwits.”
Well, the real verse is "hypocrites" but these liberals aren't exactly hypocrites. "Id-i-ots", maybe?