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To: Tax-chick
Just looking at the scansion (fit of words with rhythm) I’d change “SUV” to “pickup” or “Hummer.”

Good.

In the 4th verse, I’d use “claim THAT I had done a crime of hate.”

Better. It's still awkwardly-worded.

In the last verse, you need a 3-syllable word in place of “nitwits.”

Well, the real verse is "hypocrites" but these liberals aren't exactly hypocrites. "Id-i-ots", maybe?

7 posted on 04/22/2007 4:26:17 PM PDT by Tall_Texan (NBC News - the preferred network of assassins and terrorists.)
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To: Tall_Texan
"Id-i-ots", maybe?

If you said it, "Id-ee-its" it would rhyme :-).

10 posted on 04/22/2007 4:35:42 PM PDT by Tax-chick ("And he had turned the Prime Minister's teacup into a gerbil.")
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