Let's work on this, okay??
The cave,No light, black, cold. stumbling, falling, pain. Afraid.
Afraid, no light
the cave,black, cold
stumbling, falling. pain
afraid.
Lost, confused, Time unknown, Helpless, Dieing.
Time unkown
helpless, dieing.
confused,lost.
Time unkown.
Just a couple for you to ponder on. ;)
I don't want to rewrite your work.
What you have now are fragments.
We need to work a little structure into them.
Study the other poets here--how they lay the words down.
You are gonna do just fine.
Thank you for your advise. I like both structure adjustments.
I know my abstract wording needs poetic help!
I vaguely remember that there were some rythmic rules or guidelines? What was that based on? I know that there are many different syles, but I am just looking for something that might fit with my abstract ramblings. 8^)