You're better than you give yourself credit for! No disparaging remarks from my future housemate!
;-)
But maintaining a mystery without being tiresome about it is tough! You're better at that than I.
Want more? I have six chapters now. Only thing is...one is kinda PG-13 for language. I'm not sure if I can live with that. I'm thinking about taking out the few words I put in, though how to do it without changing the feel, I'm not sure.
I'm a sissy, what can I say?