I know, I know...
Speaking of lunch...time to go heat up my soup!
And read some of your story. Just starting it again.
I think mine is too serious. Not sure how to fix that. Of course, once Mr. Love Interest shows up, things will change somewhat, but I'm already over 10k and it's been pretty much just her thoughts all that time, plus lofty blather from the elf-like dudes.
You could add a new storyline with a different character and throw in chapters of that.... I haven't read enough to make any suggestions.