Posted on 09/16/2009 9:15:30 PM PDT by fiscon1
Introduction: This is my fourth, and nowhere near last, edition in my series of exposes of Dr. Anna Chacko. The circumstances that surround this story are long and quite complicated. As such, I encourage all new readers to read my three previous pieces, here, here, and here. That said, I will try and summarize the story thus far as best I can so that readers can follow along.
Dr. Anna Chacko is currently the head of radiology at the Pittsburgh VA Hospital. She has been there since October 2008. She is also, in my estimation, a Psychopath. Almost immediately following her arrival there, folks at the VA began complaining about her behavior. She bullied people, she lied about people, and she created an environment of terror. As such in March of this year, an investigative board was formed. The recommendation of that board was to have Dr. Chacko removed as director of radiology and this decision came in April. Then, Dr. Chacko challenged the results, hired an attorney, and began reaching out to politicians. She reached out to Congressman Brad Miller of North Carolina. He reached out to General Eric Shinseki, the head of the entire VA, and eventually word came down from his office to keep Dr. Chacko in her position. She continues there to this day and sources tell me that the situation has only gotten worse since she was put back in her position.
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ping
There is a simple solution for this problem.
are you going to make everyone guess? What is the solution?
“...missed it by thhatt much.”
“Who What When Where Why and How”
You need some meet, in the FIRST paragraph.
Also, no introductions necessary, just GET TO THE POINT!
Tell us what you are going to tell us.
Tell us.
Tell us what you told us!
This is a good story, very newsworthy, upsetting but -—
Also annoying to read!
I didn’t realize that was your advice. You aren’t going to ever please everyone. If you just don’t like the way the piece is written so be it.
In order for it to gain any “legs” at all, you need at least one or two POWERFUL sentences in the first paragraph.
That is my point.
Nothing personal, I just want it to read like a good Newspaper story, or even a novel, not like a police blotter.
I guess you’ve never read Oliver Twist which started with a long dissertation about how the narratator got his name Pip. In any case, I appreciate the advice but that’s a matter of style. There’s no way to please everyone. It’s a very complicated story and jumping right in will confuse everyone who isn’t familiar with it. So, it’s done the way it’s done.
I thought you were posting the work of another person.
Granted your tale is confusing, and granted I am not worthy to refute the great Charles Dickens. All the same, a novel is not the same as a news article, and you stress the urgency of your story. We need to know, and know quickly, just what you’re talking about. Can you give us idea, even a confusing one, of what is going on? Are patients dying, or what?
I agree and one of the unique characteristics of a novel is that it can be introduced slowly but in the previous comment, they said a good novel starts with action. That’s not the case.
In any case, these are all good discussions and no one should be offended or upset. I think everyone offered constructive criticism in a very respectful manner.
It is a routine trick of the psychopath to CHANGE THE SUBJECT and attack the truthful messenger.
Rather than address the actual psychopathic havoc documented in this story, you chose to address the style of writing.
I personally had no trouble understanding the piece.
It's kind of like criticizing an autopsy report as being vague and confusing without acknowledging the dead guy's body bears obvious evidence he was brutally murdered.
If your neighbor comes running up and tells you your house is on fire, are you going to give him a lecture on his improper use of grammar in his frantic verbal message to you?
If you are aboard a sinking ship, do you really care if the spoken warning you receive is delivered in a sentence ending in a preposition?
I think that is more likely if the story gets better circulation. That will not happen if the story, itself, is too hard to digest.
Competition.
Noise.
Laziness of the reader.
Never assume that what is MOST important to the writer means a hill of beans to the reader.
Every good writer, at heart, is a SALESMAN, in that you MUST get people to buy into the idea that it is worth their time to read and digest what you write.
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