Some of my thoughts:
The typed out "August" alerted me to a military truism.
Whenever possible and sometimes when not very possible always, always take a shortcut.
Military orders are generally full of shortcuts. JAN, FEB, MAR, APR, MAY, JUN, JUL, AUG, SEP, OCT, NOV, DEC were all the months.
"Off WP" instead of "officer will proceed" never "you will go" or "you will proceed".
"AR NLT" instead of "arrive not later than" or "arrive no later than" the memo actually has "not later than" and then (NLT) in parentheses. WHY?
Lastly - Rank was always ASAP(As Short As Possible) 1st Lieut, nope, it was always 1LT.
Oh, and lest we forget. National Guard units were always the ugly stepchildren of the military and getting hand-me-downs, not top of the line typewriters, especially since no one above the rank of buck Sargent ever typed anything longer than a brief "Reply by Endorsement."
These documents look to be the work of someone who had a couple of years or ROTC and quit before advanced ROTC because he realized he had to be in more than a couple of years to make 5 stars.
At best they are the work of a fresh recruit to the TANG and LTC Killian was not a man who knew how to constructively chew ass.
Thank you for sharing those very good points! And thanks for coming aboard!! This is really getting exciting because I think we snagged the rats again!!!