No, I can tell what you are driving at with these, so the order is not the problem. The problem with your commentary is that it does not really comment on the scripture in view, but rather gives me your thoughts on what the Church is that you would have given me regardless of any particular scripture.
You do make a point that is scriptural, regarding the Kingdom of God being inside of the beleiver. However, I also showed you that this metaphor does not preclude the Kingdom of God form being a social organization, as there is plenty of scripture where it is used in that way. And indeed, the Catholic Church never teaches that salvation is somehow divorced from the internal life of the soul. In fact, the entire church life is centered around the two sacraments, confession and Eucharist, that are deeply personal by their very nature.