| ... a 10-year-old girl whose suspected body was found "suspected body"? |
Fits right in with the "prowling pickup truck" line.
Jourbalists. Sinking lower and lower every day.
Hailey Owens, whose body police believe was found in a storage bin.
...and what about this line?
Michelle Edwards, who witnessed the attack with her husband, told police that the man driving the vehicle — with long grey hair — pulled over to her and asked for directions, calling, “Hey, come here a minute,” according to the felony probable cause statement.
"...pulled over to her?" not only is the wording awkward, but it makes the reader have to decipher who "her" is...