Ok love the arrangement and the lyrics but you do need a professional vocal.
That’s my buddy Ronnie. He’s OK, not Nashville great though. He does fine for demo’s. I sound even worse.
If you had some idea how a shoestring budget could find a better singer, I’m all ears. Ronnie did the arrangement and most instrumentals, and the recording here. (I do a few instrumentals.) Still we realize the best thing would be to get the attention of a professional publisher who will then get a good artist and a million dollar studio behind it. I’m beginning to submit things to BMI now, to which I belong (it’s free) for possible referral to publishers if they think it’s good. Ronnie is ASCAP.