This is incredibly picky and not worthy of either of us, but I wish YOU would worry about periods and punctuation.
It is not easy to read your run on sentences and if you want to make your points more accessible, you might consider this suggestion.
Maybe he's going for a Don Marquis type of style?
If so, it needs more line breaks and a cat and a cockroach would be nice.
(before anyone asks, archy and mehitabel is before even my time, though I have always enjoyed them)