[Protect the Bill of Rights]

Eventually I raced home without showering in order to take Libby's call. When he finally reached me at around 3 p.m., we spoke for a few minutes as I sprawled on my bed.

This first paragraph win the prize for idiocy. I almost expect the next sentence to be "As I was talking on the phone, Mandy comes in, smelling of chlorine. She sprawls beside me........"

You get the picture. My brain cannot even visualize what comes next (gotta keep the Egg McMuffin down)

[SE Mom]

It's pretty funny, isn't it? One imagines most high-school students in a creative writing class would do a better job telling this story...

[Bahbah]

"As I was talking on the phone, Mandy comes in, smelling of chlorine. She sprawls beside me........"

LOL. You had pretty much the same reaction to Cooper's opening that I did.

[sine_nomine]

It was a dark and moonless night. Somewhere outside a dog barked.

[HawaiianGecko]

	Eventually I raced home without showering in order to take Libby's call. When he finally reached me at around 3 p.m., we spoke for a few minutes as I sprawled on my bed. That's the line that caught my attention and made me ask if he really needed to write this in the manner of a Harlequin romance novel for me to understand the story.

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