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To: sitetest

Yes, you're absolutely right. I think I got lost in the wandering maze of her prose. I didn't even mention the mind-numbing effect of the first seven or eight words which open that sentence, a sentence that simultaneously shocks me with its inhuman brutality and puts me to sleep with its fuzzy banality:

"The ongoing debate continues surrounding the attempt to once again criminalize abortions or to once and for all guarantee the freedom of the individual women's right to decide for herself whether she will have an abortion."


251 posted on 10/27/2005 1:57:17 PM PDT by Cicero (Marcus Tullius)
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To: Cicero

Dear Cicero,

It was easy to miss. As you point out, this is not precisely tight, succinct, clear prose.

However, if you read it aloud, and imagine it as a speech being given to a certain type of audience, it isn't as bad (or as unintentionally funny) as if you're reading it as a formal written document. I can imagine it as the work of a mediocre speaker trying to sound "off the cuff," and "unrehearsed."

Personally, though, I'd be embarrassed to give such a speech.


sitetest


252 posted on 10/27/2005 2:00:42 PM PDT by sitetest (If Roe is not overturned, no unborn child will ever be protected in law.)
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