[moog]

The problem is they are tested on their indoctrination. They are graded on their indoctrination. Their indoctrination becomes a part of them. The time they are in school is more than when they are with you. YOU lose from EVERY persepctive and as they get older you have less and less control.

My super-secret decoder ring helps me indoctinate the kids I teach to learn how to read and write and other terrible things like working hard, having strong families, respecting others, obeying parents, etc. Maybe I should turn it off.

[DaveTesla]

"My super-secret decoder ring helps me indoctinate the kids I teach to learn how to read and write and other terrible things like working hard, having strong families, respecting others, obeying parents, etc. Maybe I should turn it off."

It is indoctrinate not indoctinate.
Your first sentence has more 25 words and is almost
illegible due to its run on.
It is completely unbalanced.

[DaveTesla]

The problem is they are tested on their indoctrination.
They are graded on their indoctrination. Their
indoctrination becomes a part of them. The time they are in
school is more than when they are with you. YOU lose from
EVERY persepctive and as they get older you have less and
less control.

The problem is they are tested on their indoctrination.
This sentence is passive.

They are graded on their indoctrination.
This sentence is passive.

Consider revising these two passive and fragmented sentences to,
"The problem is they are tested and graded on their indoctrination."

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YOU lose from EVERY persepctive and as they get older
you have less and less control.

In this sentence the word perspective is misspelled and
the comma after older is missing.

This sentence should read,
"YOU lose from EVERY perspective and as they get older, you
have less and less control."