I like the second version better. It’s less preachy, or like a predictable, Ping Pong/ Metronome rhythm of dialog. The description of SAL is interesting, learning what a “day’s” routine requires him to set up for his continued life.
The notion of overall timelessness is interesting. Humans are used to clear, tight schedules and expectations. We observe or celebrate certain markers of time, birthdays, anniversaries, memorials, paydays.
What to do when nothing really changes outside of the sun’s presence, followed by the lack of a sun’s presence.
That brings us back to Sun Worship, so easy,even a Caveman would consider doing it.
Thank you for your kind words, and the vote totals are now Four for Story One, Two for Story Two.