I like it... did you write and perform?
The music sucks, half the words cannot be understood, and she doesn’t sing she whines.
Don’t kill the messenger, you asked me to listen.
Well, it’s not bad. Can’t understand the words and it repeats too much, but really not bad.
The vocals are good.
The melody is ok.
But there is no ‘hook’ to the song.
It sounds like a lot of songs already out there.
It needs something ‘different’ to make it stand out.
And repeating words doesn’t help much.
A song should tell a story that flows continually.
JMHO
Almost the entire class gave one of the stories thumbs down and the other story a thumbs up.
Turned out that the thumbs down story was written by John Updike and the thumbs up story was written by the teacher's college-age son.
Pretty good if you ask me. Quite catchy. Nice vocal, lots of nice guitar fills. Drums sounded like they needed to be compressed more. Guitar solo was a little too metal I thought. It should have been more pop. But overall good.