Good to see you Knitting. Ah darn, it is disappointing when a poem does not go so well.
Best wishes on your writing today, you are putting out some gorgeous work. Really heart melting. ;)
Glad you like it! I do like it a lot...I would post more of it here, but so much of it’s InuYasha manga oriented right now, that it’d take a lot of explaining. But it’s been a good venue for me to stretch those writing muscles.
This I wrote as a halloween poem, but it may assume too much if you’re not familiar:
Shiver, woman, shiver,
beneath the pale moonlight,
a touch of youki raises hair,
though nothing is in sight
piercing eyes are watching you —
glittering, sharp, and bright.
Shiver, woman, shiver
as you walk beneath the trees,
Is that rustling that you hear
just branches in the breeze?
Or as you search the shadows,
is he smiling as he sees?
Shiver, woman, shiver
as red blends into black.
you hear a sound, you turn to look,
there’s nothing at your back —
he sniffs the spice of your unease
as you walk the shadowed track.
Shiver, woman, shiver
as a shadow slips behind,
a sardonic smirk, a flash of eye —
you look, but cannot find,
a silent footstep follows you
tugging at your mind,
Shiver, woman, shiver,
he walks softly behind you,
feel his breath hot on your neck -
what now will you do?
Feel the tingles down your spine
in electric midnight blue.
Shiver, woman, shiver,
as his breath stirs in your hair,
a single claw runs down the neck
you offer to him there,
stand there absolutely still -
breath softly if you dare.
Shiver, woman, shiver
as he whispers in your ear,
how odd, the pounding of your heart
while he makes his message clear
your thoughts swirl with a thousand dreams,
he tells you his only fear:
“Don’t forget the Ramen!”
(one of the main characters is really obsessed with Ramen as being the most excellent food there is. The woman in the poem is the person who brings it to him.) Youki is that eerie feeling that supernatural beings make one feel...the aura they give off.