[carton253]

I don't know enough to critique poetry, but I read both poems. In the first one, you capture the longing to return but the frustration of not being able to very well. I think the imagery is good - especially using the air and sea.

I am sorry about Azrei Levanon. It is good poem and I like how you link it to the yearning of 2,000 years

PS - have you ever seen the Jordan River? It really doesn't flow rapidly anywhere. In America, we would call it a creek.

[Eleutheria5]

“PS - have you ever seen the Jordan River? It really doesn’t flow rapidly anywhere. In America, we would call it a creek.”

Drat. I suppose it isn’t “wide and deep,” either. So why did Joshua split it, I wonder.

[Eleutheria5]

“PS - have you ever seen the Jordan River? It really doesn’t flow rapidly anywhere. In America, we would call it a creek.”

So what can I say about the Jordan. Must be two syllable word with accent on the first. Flaccid? Tepid? Constant? Frigid bed? Placid? Sluggish?