[antidisestablishment]

Paragraphs are reader's friends. ;)

[glorgau]

Right after the world stopped shaking like a kitten in the jaws of a pit bull,

It was a dark and stormy night... ;-)

[Rokke]

I'm going to say this as gently as I can, but based on the excerpt you posted here, it would appear your research for this book was almost zero. Just for starters, an F-16 is a single seat fighter, backseaters in two seat fighters are not called co-pilots, and no fighter aircraft is controlled by a yoke. And again, that is just for starters.

Having said that, I enjoyed your writing style. You seem to have a real talent. Which makes it even more perplexing that you didn't spend more time (any time?!?) researching what you wrote about. Based on the subject matter of your book, your intended audience is probably going to have some level of interest (if not familiarity) in subjects involving military equipment. They're going to read what you posted here and reach for the next book on the shelf. In all honesty, it wouldn't take a lot of time to fix what you've written, and it would GREATLY add to the credibility of your effort.