The Overused Transition? - Grammar and usage help requested

vanity

[MHGinTN]

Uh, excuse me; here's an example: "He parked in front of the last garage door, the one that would not be opened: behind the door was a pre-war MG Sedan, perfectly restored, that was never driven."

[Jeff Chandler]

Better yet:

"He parked in front of the last garage door, the one that would not be opened: behind the door was a pre-war MG Sedan, perfectly restored, in mint condition, that was never driven. Cherry."

[Jeff Chandler]

Brevity.

[Jeff Chandler]

Brevity is the soul of wit. On Fridays it's filet of sole.

[SampleMan]

Run on sentience, missspellings, I can't believe you could accusiate me of such things, however, I have benn known to make misteaks before, but never on a grammar thread, and never in such abundance, since I am far too good at this from my public school educutation, where eye once had a toad named Willy, but then I gradutatored and here I am, giving advice on grammar and proper sentence structure.

You got me :) If I were French, I would surrender now.