Terrific job. A tad sycophantic perhaps, but otherwise near perfect. Thanks for sharing.
I suppose the price of perfection is time. Given enough time, any story can be trimmed of the non-essential and poor word choice can be substituted with something better.
But I notice that when I near finishing one of these FR vanities, I don't have the patience to edit it rigorously so I end up posting some foolish errors. Too bad, you can't correct the errors on FR. Then again, if you could, maybe I could never finish it :-)