[RosieCotton]

I started to read it and then got distracted, which is part of the reason I've been hiding all day...;-) I need to finish. It's interesting reading so far...you have a very different style from the rest of us. Kinda poetic, in a completely un-elvish sort of way...

[Overtaxed]

I'm better after revisions. I don't think I've really gotten into these characters yet (more characterization crap?)

I just don't have much of this stuff fleshed out yet, so I figure if I write the scenes, by the time I have 50000 words I'll actually know where the plot is.