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Writer's Guild: YOU DECIDE. Two versions of the same story, you pick.
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| 08/06/2025
| By Laz A. Mataz
Posted on 08/07/2025 5:35:21 PM PDT by Lazamataz
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posted on
08/07/2025 5:35:21 PM PDT
by
Lazamataz
To: piytar; LambSlave; StAntKnee; HYPOCRACY; EEGator; Big Red Badger; Army Air Corps; Chickensoup; ...
Fun little contest between two stories! Which one will win????
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posted on
08/07/2025 5:37:02 PM PDT
by
Lazamataz
(I'm so on fire that I feel the need to stop, drop, and roll!)
To: Lazamataz
Laz,
I like both the short stories, I thought maybe you could mix them together with the TV aspect of the second one as an afterward to the first one. Kind of like “well I’m done arguing with you, what do you want to do watch TV?”
If I had to choose one of the other I think I’d go with number one. It sounded more cerebral. Just one man’s opinion. Jim
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posted on
08/07/2025 5:45:10 PM PDT
by
Wasichu
To: Wasichu; piytar
One vote for Story One! piytar voted for Story One earlier, that’s two for Story One.
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posted on
08/07/2025 5:46:36 PM PDT
by
Lazamataz
(I'm so on fire that I feel the need to stop, drop, and roll!)
To: Lazamataz
Just on another note, Amazon Prime movie: “The Last Rifleman “ was well done and worth a watch. Kleenex a good idea.
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posted on
08/07/2025 5:47:02 PM PDT
by
Mark
(DONATE ONCE every 3 months-is that a big deal?)
To: Lazamataz
Just made me hungry, is all.
🤣
So I’m going to say the first one, but only because it’s the first one you read and the ending hasn’t been given away yet. By the time you read the second, you know the twist. Anyway, neat concept!
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posted on
08/07/2025 5:49:06 PM PDT
by
Magnum44
(...against all enemies, foreign and domestic... )
To: Magnum44
Three votes for Story One!
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posted on
08/07/2025 5:50:06 PM PDT
by
Lazamataz
(I'm so on fire that I feel the need to stop, drop, and roll!)
To: Lazamataz
I’d vote for #2 because I am saturated with global warming crud.
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posted on
08/07/2025 5:50:10 PM PDT
by
GingisK
To: GingisK
Three votes for Story One, one vote for Story Two! What a horse race! 😁
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posted on
08/07/2025 5:50:49 PM PDT
by
Lazamataz
(I'm so on fire that I feel the need to stop, drop, and roll!)
To: Mark
Just on another note, Amazon Prime movie: “The Last Rifleman “ was well done and worth a watch. Kleenex a good idea.Thanks, I'll check it out!
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posted on
08/07/2025 5:51:34 PM PDT
by
Lazamataz
(I'm so on fire that I feel the need to stop, drop, and roll!)
To: Lazamataz
Go with the first. You can incorporate something like this:
(Regarding Pompeii) "They moved next to Vesuvius. They knew what they were getting into. Let them get covered in ash!"
To: Larry Lucido
LOL! Love it.
Four votes for Story One, one for Story Two.
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posted on
08/07/2025 5:55:38 PM PDT
by
Lazamataz
(I'm so on fire that I feel the need to stop, drop, and roll!)
To: All
Whichever story wins, will be posted
HERE. 😊😊😊
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posted on
08/07/2025 5:58:07 PM PDT
by
Lazamataz
(I'm so on fire that I feel the need to stop, drop, and roll!)
To: Lazamataz
I like the second version better. It’s less preachy, or like a predictable, Ping Pong/ Metronome rhythm of dialog. The description of SAL is interesting, learning what a “day’s” routine requires him to set up for his continued life.
The notion of overall timelessness is interesting. Humans are used to clear, tight schedules and expectations. We observe or celebrate certain markers of time, birthdays, anniversaries, memorials, paydays.
What to do when nothing really changes outside of the sun’s presence, followed by the lack of a sun’s presence.
That brings us back to Sun Worship, so easy,even a Caveman would consider doing it.
To: Lazamataz
I am fatter than both of them. My vote is worth perhaps three of theirs.
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posted on
08/07/2025 6:00:29 PM PDT
by
GingisK
To: lee martell
Thank you for your kind words, and the vote totals are now Four for Story One, Two for Story Two.
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posted on
08/07/2025 6:01:33 PM PDT
by
Lazamataz
(I'm so on fire that I feel the need to stop, drop, and roll!)
To: GingisK
I am fatter than both of them. My vote is worth perhaps three of theirs.No vote adjustments for weight! LOL
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posted on
08/07/2025 6:02:05 PM PDT
by
Lazamataz
(I'm so on fire that I feel the need to stop, drop, and roll!)
To: Lazamataz
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posted on
08/07/2025 6:04:12 PM PDT
by
Drago
To: Lazamataz
“What do you want to Do?”
.
“What Else is on T.V.?”
Truman Show
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posted on
08/07/2025 6:04:49 PM PDT
by
Big Red Badger
(ALL Things Will be Revealed !)
To: Drago
Whoa! Story Two is catching up!
Four votes for Story One, Three for Story Two!
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posted on
08/07/2025 6:06:21 PM PDT
by
Lazamataz
(I'm so on fire that I feel the need to stop, drop, and roll!)
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