You and I have been Freepers for a long time. I sincerely appreciate your many posts. I want to love your manuscript, but I do not get it. I am sorry. it does not captivate my attention. Just being honest. No disrespect.
Ok. I appreciate the honest feedback. Maybe your attention might be captured later, when it shifts into a technology-sci-fi thing.
I think I’m keeping things as-is. I won’t be scrapping it and rewriting AGAIN. That said: What loses your attention?