The first rewrite was needed. There was nowhere near enough conflict. It read like a teenage Hardy Boys novel. This write is much better.
Me after finishing writing a chapter at 1 o’clock in the morning:
“This is gold!”
Me after reading that same chapter the next afternoon:
“Who wrote this sh!t?”
Maybe my own personal rule should be to stop writing at 8 PM.
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Really, give a physical, detailed description of everything mentioned.
Oh, and one more thing. I read somewhere that a good novel must contain a big surprise at about the half-way point. It must be believable, yet unexpected and jarring.
That makes sense. So that’s what I added in one of my rewrites. An important central character got himself murdered. I think that was a good move.