An impartial review? Hard to do because it means getting well past what I think about her but overall, I actually think she did fairly well... no major gaffes, a bunch of ahem-cough-clearings but no major coughing spells, she got a few good zingers in on Trump, pandered a bunch to the Bernie crowd, she lied/exaggerated/downplayed/obfuscated quite convincingly... overall, her supporters probably will love what she had to say.
Bill fell asleep. This is comedy gold right here -
http://ntknetwork.com/bill-clinton-falls-asleep-during-hillary-clintons-convention-speech/