If you make it a little longer and edit the words for easier singing, it could easily go into hard rock. Being a fan of metal, I dare it sounds like something Kreator (old guard of thrash metal from Germany) would write.
I don’t mean to say it’s bad, because I think the content is great. I dunno if you have any clips of it to music, but I personally think it would go great with some overdriven/distorted guitar, and a guy singing that could relate to it so any listeners believe what is being sung.
Just my two cents.
Thank you, I’ve gotten plenty of compliments on what I’ve written before and since I’ve been writing for 11 years than I guess I must get a compliment somewhere down the line. Alright, I guess I can add another verse(I thought that it might be too long) and I also guess I could shorten the lines. I love music, in general, and I sort of like metal music, so I guess I’ll check out Kreator.
I am more of a poet than a musician, so I cannot really write sheet music. I just wrote the thing a few days ago, and I cannot play an instrument plus my voice is way too deep and too offkey. The other problem is that I don’t know anybody who is reliable enough to work on this with me, currently. I guess I could call up my friend but he is a lot busier than I am, and hardly has seen me in these past few months.
Oh, and www.MerrickEgber.info for more of what I do. I guess that I am too desperate to not resort to a shameless plug. If I had enough money from song royalties, I sometimes think about getting a place in some small town far outside of civilization where I can breathe.