Posted on 02/16/2013 3:35:33 PM PST by Absolutely Nobama
Perfect. Well done! More!
[If any debt-sucking sociopaths whine about your great work, ignore them. Don’t let hags or their pet SNAGs (sensitive New Age guys) weld your hook to the bottom, only because you presented characters resembling them. Works like yours are much needed. Drive on!]
Gosh, thank you FRiend!
“Are you planning a sequel?”
This one wore me out, believe me. Writing fiction is way harder than it looks.
Yep. Already had it on right after I was sworn into the Army in August, 1956. Before most of he current voters wre born. On their behalf. Seriously. Still have the fatigues, plus an M1 Garand, steel pot, ammo belt, and combat pack. Came in third in the local DCM rifle competition only a few years ago. Just keepin' ready.
Or is imbecilic condescension the only trick in your bag?
That's two tricks, both at the same time! Thanks for the applause! But no, I also do some time as a grammar Nazi, as well as an inventor of electronic component processes incorporated in most of the electronic products you use. Studying Koine Greek and Biblical hermeneutics, also, somewhat. And, Oh -- pestering fellow FReepers from time to time.
Anything else?
Have you nudged your Senator, Congressman, or state representative on critical conservative issues lately? They only respond to the squeaking wheels, not couch potatoes. Just sayin', E. --
I’ve edited for several publications. Your story flows. It was very well written as a creative work.
Mister Absolutely NO(whose name shall not be mentioned), very good job. Very sobering, and as those of us with eyes to see can see, coming to a United State near you. Heck, it’s already here, and we’re just a little behind the times in our “comfort zones.”
Don’t let the arm chair “story editor bastages” wear you down. You done good, Mister. Thank you for sharing your creation with your FReeper Friends.
Thanks, FRiend! It’s greatly appreciated!
Again, thank you. I’ve written some other stories that have have appeared on FR. If you’re interested, here are the links:
http://www.freerepublic.com/focus/f-bloggers/2900750/posts
http://www.freerepublic.com/focus/f-bloggers/2659433/posts
http://www.freerepublic.com/focus/f-bloggers/2658885/posts
Thank you for the kind words. They’re greatly appreciated.
PS-— You can always call me Alan. I don’t know what I was thinking when I picked my cheesy screen name. It is what it is and it’s too late to change it now.
Well done, if depressing, but that’s inevitable without getting into fantasy land right now.
Welcome to the USSA, comrades!
Silence is indeed consent. RESIST LOUDLY!
You think this could never happen in Obama’s America? Seriously?
BTW, I’m working a a story off and on similar to this but from the angle of Obongocare. As I read things like this, I do think SWAT teams should be banned. I used to like the 1970’s era SWAT TV show, but when the tune comes on the radio, I have to turn it off now.
Thanks for the kind words, FRiend!
Sounds interesting! Give me a holler when it’s done.
I can see your story happening... to me!
Nothing Jack did was wrong, oh wait! He went against the system thinking!
Our country is quickly becoming a society where “what our generation considers normal” to a society where up is down, left is right, and what “used to be normal” is now taboo.
Oh, I dunno about that.
The guys who run TOTUS don't seem to have a problem with it.
Jack, recognizing from his military training he was behind enemy lines, played the poor traumatized soldier for the principal and doctor, agreeing with everything they said. He left the school that day with orders to attend sensitivity training along with anger management counseling, which he did for the next several weeks.
Surprisingly, after the schools Winter Solstice break, neither the principal nor the schools psychologist returned for work. They had both gone away on vacation and nobody ever heard from them again. Jack ran for local office and won several elections, which eventually led to a successful run for Congress. He was always known as a very calculating, intelligent person, and he was instrumental in overturning several years worth of poor legislation.
enjoyed the lead up, but agree, the end needs some positive results, not just everybody dying and the carpet munchin affirmative action hags continuing to pillage...
we need solutions from heros, not depression...
Where do I buy the book?
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