OK. Here’s a shorter form. What is gained by this version? What is lost? Feedback is requested:
Short-Form Eligibility Bill
Before being placed on a ballot, a candidate for President or Vice-President must state his/her name and place of birth and parents’ names, provide proof of being a US resident for 14 years, and sign a consent form for the Secretary of State to receive certified copies of all his/her birth records and all his/her and his/her parents’ citizenship records – including all transaction logs for all records.
The Secretary of State must secure all said statements, proofs, and records, redact information to comply with state and FOIA privacy provisions, and post scans of all the documentation to the Secretary of State’s website. Redacted originals must be made available for public viewing.
The Secretary of State must also complete and post to the SOS website a list saying whether the records confirm that the candidate was born in the United States to 2 US citizen parents, will be at least 45 by the start of the Presidential term, has been a US resident for 14 years, and shows no discrepancies in transaction logs that call into question the veracity or legal validity of the records.
If any of these conditions is not met or if any person contests the eligibility of the candidate within 30 days after both the documents and the list are posted to the website, the Secretary of State shall deny placement on the ballot unless and until the judiciary, with all appeals exhausted, rules the candidate eligible.
If a provision of this bill is or becomes illegal, invalid or unenforceable in any jurisdiction, that shall not affect:
1. the validity or enforceability in that jurisdiction of any other provision of this bill; or
2. the validity or enforceability in other jurisdictions of that or any other provision of this bill.
BDZ, you have done a good job on cleaning up the language and making it easier to read and understand. That will help in convincing legislators as to the merits of your bill. Since you are absolutely wed to the 2 citizen-parent theory, this is probably as good as you are going to get, keeping in mind the previously discussed infirmities. Good luck finding a sponsor for the the bill.