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Chapters 1-4 of my new novel, "Dimensions" (first draft)
Original Content | 3/5/2024 | By Laz A. Mataz

Posted on 03/05/2024 5:25:36 AM PST by Lazamataz

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To: Triple
The space discs over big cities, however, seems overused to the point of almost cliché - Independence Day & others?

Well, it kinda cannot be helped. I will tie the discs to the real-life UFO sightings that the government has finally admitted, and it will make more sense why I used this particular (and previously used) trope.

41 posted on 03/05/2024 12:33:15 PM PST by Lazamataz (Laz 2005: "First, we beat the Soviet Union. Then we became them.")
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To: Lazamataz

I’m sure you thought this over but...do you really want to do the woke thing?

white and Black. white and black. White and Black.

Stood out like a sore thumb. Ouch.


42 posted on 03/05/2024 3:22:53 PM PST by WHATNEXT?
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To: Lazamataz

You are known for quirky. Will there be some later? So, far a little bland.


43 posted on 03/05/2024 3:25:52 PM PST by WHATNEXT?
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To: daniel1212; Lazamataz

Interesting posts Guys.
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I’m a Bumper Sticker writer and would like to write an Epic Narrative along the line’s of ‘The Cage’ from STAR TREK...
Title would be;
“IN THE BEGINNING, CreAItor AI.”
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I admire you for putting together more than a couple of Paragraphs!
AI seems to be coming up in our future
On this planet so Keep it Real with a Twist ——
and Few F******g words


44 posted on 03/05/2024 3:29:24 PM PST by Big Red Badger (ALL Things Will be Revealed !)
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To: Big Red Badger
“IN THE BEGINNING, CreAItor AI.”

Which, being a perversion of the one true God in the hands of its programmers, the masses would prefer - initially. Which results in comprehensive dictatorial control and an am-AL-gamation of perversions.

45 posted on 03/06/2024 4:22:17 AM PST by daniel1212 (Turn 2 the Lord Jesus who saves damned+destitute sinners on His acct, believe, b baptized+follow HIM)
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To: Lazamataz

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46 posted on 03/06/2024 4:50:28 AM PST by unread (I pledge allegiance to the flag of the United States of America, and to the REPUBLIC..!)
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To: daniel1212

Exactly the same twists that satan uses.
Thanks


47 posted on 03/06/2024 4:57:42 AM PST by Big Red Badger (ALL Things Will be Revealed !)
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To: WHATNEXT?

Oh, there will be QUIRKY. Trust that.


48 posted on 03/06/2024 7:18:50 AM PST by Lazamataz (Laz 2005: "First, we beat the Soviet Union. Then we became them.")
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To: WHATNEXT?

The Woke crap was introduced by Microsoft Word. I’ll correct.


49 posted on 03/06/2024 7:19:56 AM PST by Lazamataz (Laz 2005: "First, we beat the Soviet Union. Then we became them.")
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To: null and void
It wouldn't be difficult for the aliens to be more likable than our fellow humans. Or present themselves as such!

Oh, that is in the works. Turns out there are over 7000 alien races with this level of advanced technology in our galaxy. There is a large communication network, that we will be admitted to ... once we learn how to communicate.

50 posted on 03/06/2024 7:25:42 AM PST by Lazamataz (Laz 2005: "First, we beat the Soviet Union. Then we became them.")
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To: EEGator
Read after work.

...and....?

51 posted on 03/06/2024 7:29:59 AM PST by Lazamataz (Laz 2005: "First, we beat the Soviet Union. Then we became them.")
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To: Yo-Yo
BFL

.... your reflections...?

52 posted on 03/06/2024 7:30:31 AM PST by Lazamataz (Laz 2005: "First, we beat the Soviet Union. Then we became them.")
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To: Lurker
Will read it later.

What did you think?

53 posted on 03/06/2024 7:31:20 AM PST by Lazamataz (Laz 2005: "First, we beat the Soviet Union. Then we became them.")
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To: gitmo
Bookmark for later when I’m back home.

What was your impression when you finally read it?

54 posted on 03/06/2024 7:32:03 AM PST by Lazamataz (Laz 2005: "First, we beat the Soviet Union. Then we became them.")
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To: Ciaphas Cain
Bookmark for later when I’m back home.

Love to hear your thoughts!

55 posted on 03/06/2024 7:32:59 AM PST by Lazamataz (Laz 2005: "First, we beat the Soviet Union. Then we became them.")
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To: Lazamataz

It’s not bad at all. I’ve read much worse from Kindle.

Well done.

L


56 posted on 03/06/2024 7:34:10 AM PST by Lurker ( Peaceful coexistence with the Left is not possible. Stop pretending that it is.)
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To: StAntKnee
You are the 451st Satisfied Customer!™
57 posted on 03/06/2024 7:35:54 AM PST by Lazamataz (Laz 2005: "First, we beat the Soviet Union. Then we became them.")
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To: Lazamataz

I’ll be honest with you and say that I have only read chapter 1 and part of chapter 2 thus far. But I shall finish it tonight and provide you with my worthless, unappreciated, and unnecessary thoughts.<P.

P.S., the sex scene between Jason and Sarah had better be good...


58 posted on 03/06/2024 7:36:37 AM PST by Yo-Yo (Is the /Sarc tag really necessary? Pray for President Biden: Psalm 109:8)
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To: Lazamataz

Lol, I had volleyball. I promise a response tonight.


59 posted on 03/06/2024 7:41:28 AM PST by EEGator
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To: TheOldLady; Cyber Liberty; CatherineofAragon; melissa_in_ga; Slings and Arrows; ...
StAntKnee was kind enough to give me solid writing tips. I suspect his work is stellar! I know his writing tips were topnotch.

As a fellow long-term and solid Freeper, I've love it if you took a moment to visit:

StAntKnee's substack / novel location

Maybe subscribe , but definitely if you choose, give his novel a read (“Curse of The Kavorka”). I know he'd appreciate your comments, too, over on that site.

60 posted on 03/06/2024 7:44:01 AM PST by Lazamataz (Laz 2005: "First, we beat the Soviet Union. Then we became them.")
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