Posted on 12/06/2008 5:47:34 AM PST by pepe234
Hi, could someone give a glimpse on my introduction of my thesis, please? I'm not english speaker, and I really want to know whether match your appetite or not. If somewhere are improvable, please give your suggestion. Thanks!
Diabetes mellitus (DM) is a major endocrine disorder which affects approximately 5% of the world’s population. It has a significant impact on the health, quality of life, and life expectancy of patients, as well as on the health care system. Diabetes mellitus is divided into two major categories: type 1 diabetes (formerly known as insulin-dependent diabetes mellitus, or IDDM), and type 2 diabetes (formerly known as non-insulin dependent diabetes mellitus, or NIDDM). In particular, the most common, accounting for 90% of patients is type 2 diabetes. The cause of type 2 diabetes is a combination of resistance to insulin action and an inadequate compensatory insulin-secretory response. In the past, several studies have been carried out on the potential health effects of soy and soy isoflavones in lowering risk of certain diseases, such as breast cancer and intestinal cancer. Soy intake may improve blood lipid levels in humans and animals and decrease arterial fatty streaks in animals, therefore reducing the risk of developing atherosclerosis. Isoflavones, as the main hypolipidemic agent in soy, was focused on their antioxidative and mild estrogenic activity by considerable research. It also said isoflavone has a role in lowering cholesterol levels. Genistein is one of the main isoflavinoid found in soy beans and is a strong antioxidant. Agakong, a wild soybean which was bred by means of interspecific cross breeding between Eunhakong (Glycine max) and KLG10084 (Glycine soja), has a green seed-coat color and a very small size. Generally, small seed-sized soybeans have good seed vigor, high hypocotyl elongation, and a high sprout yield. Recent study reported that the total isoflavone contents (9,684.8 μg/g) of Agakong was two or three times more than the proportion of Eunhakong and KLG10084. Agakong3, which was enhanced from Agakong, are expected has a much higher content of total isoflavone comparing to Agakong. In this study, the possible anti-diabetic effects of Agakong3, in db/db mice have been evaluated.
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This sentence needs to be corrected:
“Agakong3, which was enhanced from Agakong, are expected has a much higher content of total isoflavone comparing to Agakong”
I’m enraged.
Why does no one do a thesis on the problem of canine dingle berries?
Your sentence structure and spelling are okay. But your paragraphs are a mess. Each paragraph needs a topic sentence and two or three supporting sentences ellaborating on the topic sentence.
Next, I would not say this qualifies as a thesis statement. You did not say anywhere what fact you are trying to establish or what argument you are going to make. You merely listed a bunch of facts but did not relate how you were going to use the facts to state your case.
Ah, I see that your last sentence gives a slight indication of where you are going.
BTW, first page is free, after that I charge, capitalist you know.
"Diabetes mellitus (DM) is a major endocrine disorder which affects approximately 5% of the world’s population. It has significant impact on the health, quality of life, and life expectancy of patients, as well as on the health care system. Diabetes mellitus is divided into two major categories: type 1 diabetes (formerly known as insulin-dependent diabetes mellitus, or IDDM), and type 2 diabetes (formerly known as non-insulin dependent diabetes mellitus, or NIDDM). In particular, the most common, accounting for 90% of patients is type 2 diabetes. The cause of type 2 diabetes is a combination of resistance to insulin action and an inadequate compensatory insulin-secretion response. In the past, several studies have been carried out on the potential health effects of soy and soy isoflavones in lowering risk of certain diseases, such as breast cancer and intestinal cancer. Soy intake may improve blood lipid levels in humans and animals and decrease arterial fatty streaks in animals, therefore thereby reducing the risk of developing atherosclerosis. Isoflavones, as the main hypolipidemic agent in soy, has been the focus of considerable research into its antioxidative and mild estrogenic activity. It has also been reported that isoflavone has a role in lowering cholesterol levels. Genistein is one of the main isoflavinoid found in soy beans and is a strong antioxidant.
Agakong, a wild soybean which was bred by means of interspecific cross breeding between Eunhakong (Glycine max) and KLG10084 (Glycine soja), has a green seed-coat color and a very small size. Generally, small seed-sized soybeans have good seed vigor, high hypocotyl elongation, and a high sprout yield. Some recent studies (Or, “A recent study”) reported that the total isoflavone contents (9,684.8 μg/g) of Agakong is two or three times more than the proportion of Eunhakong and KLG10084. Agakong3, which was enhanced from Agakong, as expected, has a much higher content of total isoflavone compared to Agakong. In this study, the possible anti-diabetic effects of Agakong3, in db/db mice have been evaluated."
How about
"In this study, Agakong3 will be revealed to slow or even reverse the effects of diabetes melitus 2 in laboratory mice"?
A thesis statement needs to establish what you are going to prove, however your sentence which I quoted above, merely tells what is being evaluated. It needs to also have the expected outcome of the evaluation.
Me say you thesis look much very good.
“A thesis statement needs to establish what you are going to prove, however your sentence which I quoted above, merely tells what is being evaluated. It needs to also have the expected outcome of the evaluation.”
Excellent! (It’s also nice to see someone else who gives the newbie the benefit of the doubt.) ;=)
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