Your sentence structure and spelling are okay. But your paragraphs are a mess. Each paragraph needs a topic sentence and two or three supporting sentences ellaborating on the topic sentence.
Next, I would not say this qualifies as a thesis statement. You did not say anywhere what fact you are trying to establish or what argument you are going to make. You merely listed a bunch of facts but did not relate how you were going to use the facts to state your case.
Ah, I see that your last sentence gives a slight indication of where you are going.
Back when I was goin' to school,
I never learned a thing
All I did was daydream,
a-waitin' for the bell to ring
I had a certain teacher,
I always tried to impress her
When she stood up in the classroom,
I would mentally undress her
Then one day I decided,
that I would write a little letter
She said the spellin' was a masterpiece,
the punctuation could be better
I understood what she was saying, I got the gist of her sentiment
She said "I don't mean to be degrading,
"but here's the way that it should've went:"
Chorus) I love you period
Do you love me question mark
Please, please exclamation point
I want to hold you in parentheses
I love you period
Do you love me question mark
Please, please exclamation point
I want to hold you in parentheses
Right on up to high school,
people said I was a writin' fool
All my letters became really great,
with punctuation that was never late
But I was havin' trouble meetin' girls,
I never knew the things to say
Soon I had 'em all overwhelmed,
when they heard me talk this way, like this:
Chorus) I love you period
Do you love me question mark
Please, please exclamation point
I want to hold you in parentheses
I love you period
Do you love me question mark
Please, please exclamation point
I want to hold you in parentheses