[Alec Mouhibian]

One thing I want realized, is that my elaborate language--epitomized in the first paragraph--is not used in an attempt to prove my intelligence. It's used in an attempt to originize my writing in a way which makes it more enjoyable to read. Same goes for the humor. (Now, I may not succeed given that much complexity, but that is the purpose. And I will revise in regard to that purpose.)

That said, this essay was written three months ago, and WILL be revised (especially the first paragraph!), and one of the reasons for posting it was to see what needed the most revision. My style has since been simplified.

Also, this essay wasn't meant for FR. I'm just posting it for whom it may concern.

[DensaMensa]

my elaborate language--epitomized in the first paragraph--is not used in an attempt to prove my intelligence.

That's good, because big words do not prove intelligence, especially when they are used in a marginally accurate way. Also, words like torpitude are not even in Websters. When is the last time you talked to someone down at K-mart and you used the word "torpitude"?

It's used in an attempt to originize my writing in a way which makes it more enjoyable to read.

For whom? Certainly not your readers.

To learn to write, read great writers. (Bill Buckley may sometimes be fun to read or hear, but he has carved out his own very narrow niche and is a terrible example for young writers.)

To be a good writer use small words, short sentences, and short paragraphs. Concentrate on WHAT it is you are trying to say, not on HOW you say it to impress others.

[Mortimer Snavely]

"...my elaborate language--epitomized in the first paragraph--is not used in an attempt to prove my intelligence. It's used in an attempt to originize my writing...."

Don't worry about it. You're preaching to the choir. I wish my writing was that good when I was your age.

[PGalt]

Outstanding! Bravo! Excelsior! Keep it coming Alec.