To: Uncle Jaque
"And among them shone, if but a while
A star of ____________;...
(Help me out here)...
????" <sensitive-poet-mode> ... a star of silvery metal bright
where gossamer glass from icy dew
gave way; and roamed in rarefied space's night
the vessel of Columbian dreams we knew
now perished; ...</sensitive-poet-mode>
That's enough for my brain at this hour. Good luck on the song.
To: HiTech RedNeck
Re: "... a star of silvery metal bright
where gossamer glass from icy dew
gave way; and roamed in rarefied space's night
the vessel of Columbian dreams we knew
now perished; ..."
I like it! The contrast of imagery between fire and ice is intriguing; extreme peace, silence, and tranquility of space contrasted with the intense heat and chaos of re-entry. There is a lot of metaphorical potential in there somewhere, don't you think?
I'm having dificulty maintaining some metrical symetry and continuity with this - not a big deal in "free verse" I suppose, but it does matter if one intends to put it to some sort of coherent music.
It would be interesting to compose a musical tribute like this as a "team effort".
"Columbia" certainly was.
22 posted on
02/03/2003 9:48:31 AM PST by
Uncle Jaque
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