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Hi, Mr. Mataz. We always enjoy your posts here at the Lab. Since you are soliciting feedback on your writing, we offer some corrections & suggestions to increase your essay's persuasiveness.

P1 – Dylann Roof (may his name be obliterated from all history) (not Dillon Root) (Dillon Root played football for Fresno State.)

P2 – whose anger (not who's anger); compliant . . . (not complaint) press

P3 – sequence . . . has become (not have); nature . . . ID . . . discovery . . . have (not has)

P4 – NYT . . . fall (not fell) firmly; gun-ban camp (hyphenated adjective); Better: NYT . . . they unsurprisingly are firmly (they were never pro-2A; no event or rhetoric pushed them off a perch to fall into a camp of different opinion)

P5 – motives (not inspirations; motive implies criminality; inspiration implies virtue); . . . blames guns (not goes to guns)

P6 – without mentioning the murderers' motives (not "with no mention to the motivations"; call murder out for what it is)

P8 – completely illegally (not "in a completely illegal fashion")

P10 – Einstein famously defined insanity as repeating (not doing) the same experiment but expecting different results. (Other, clinical definitions exist.) The Lab is on a mission to expunge "do" – the lamest, laziest, least descriptive transitive verb – from English.

P11 – repeatedly (not over and over)

Separately, your nick spelled backward is zatamazal = Zat A. Mazal ~ Crude, incorrect, but effective Yiddish for Oy! My bad luck!

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